Siah Wei (Show and Not Tell)

Daniel elbowed and jostled his way through the massive crowd that had formed. The last of the crowd parted and his eyes grew wide with shock. There, on the ground, lay the pale, lifeless form of his daughter.

2 Response to "Siah Wei (Show and Not Tell)"

  1. lis Says:

    You have shown Daniel's fear and shock very well :) You do have a good style of description. Keep it up !

  2. WRC Says:

    "wah!"

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