Ronak & Hao Ming (Show and not Tell)

4) My mother shouted at me to sit down.

Our Improvement of the sentence: My mother had her mouth wide open and she was like an adult lion roaring, in an indescribable rage, as she shouted at me furiously to sit down.

1 Response to "Ronak & Hao Ming (Show and not Tell)"

  1. lis Says:

    Good usage of simile :) We have witnessed the mother's terror. Keep it up!

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